Official Haiku Thread

sweet SATISFACTION
finding what cannot be found
to hide it again

 

Fix me i'm broken,
i'm finding it hard to breathe,
lost in my own heart

 

Splintered black ice blades
winter's scalpel - one life flees
silence floods her heart

 

cut like a scalpel
slice my facade to pieces
o how words can hurt

 

words are the soul
laid open and bare
take a look and see what I know

(Sorry, my first Haiku. Did I get it right? )

 

Nooo xeno.
it's like this -

Line:

1) 5 syllables
2) 7 syllables
3) 5 syllables

Yours went:

1) 4
2) 5
3) 8

Lmao.


My soul weeps for you,
I stand here alone my love,
'til we meet again

 

Emos' heartaches bleed
a steady stream of cliché
in ironic red.

 

Bright red flares the dawn
Heart drums forth a martial beat
Of fire man is born

 

let me try to get it right this time


his heart is not mine
it flares for the girl in red
i shrivel in black

 

The light will shrivel,
darkening on the horizon,
stars will take its place

 

take my home, my food
my life’s energy possess,
yet my thoughts are free

 

(My first Haiku, correct me if I make a mistake, and let me know where I mess up )

the home is solid
although easily broken
through mere firey words

 

I only want to say that I read what wikipedia had to say
on the subject matter of Haiku--
and I am so confused

 

Hey, you didn't follow the 5-7-5 pattern!

I just read it and was confused too. What I was taught about haikus is that you can use a 5-7-5 syllable scheme, but you're not limited to that, and that Japanese haiku often have nature as its theme. I like the one Cogito did. It's loaded with the visual and the aural: flares-forth-fire and dawn-heart...beat-born, for example.

 

The Wiki article goes into more depth than most people will want. This thread deals more with te Western standard of Haiku, with the 5-7-5 syllable pattern. Still, the best Haiku, even in the modern tradition, canter on a metaphir relating two separate images.

Now back to the game:

Broken is the night
Sunbeams burn in aching eyes
Sleepless yet again

 

^ That last line was 6 syllables, as you pronounce firey like this: 'Fi-er-y' which makes it one syllable too long.

 

Sunbeams wake me up
To a bright and shiney new day
I fall back asleep

lol

 

walk through life ASLEEP
can anyone see the truth
when we don't want to

 

truth devours lies;
leaves us naked and awake-
in the light we shake

 

shakened but not stirred
images have caught up time
stirred but not quite blurred

 

Everything is good
The holidays are perfect
family and friends

 

Pure as a spring day,
the calm wind blows over me.
It shows me a way.

Edit: oh dear, it appears I have replied to the wrong post. No matter. I enjoy this game, so I will write another.

I think she loves me,
so I make her life perfect
to help me feel good.

 

Breathe so you can let
Go of the poison
You've trapped yourself in.