Sam is a white, aging accountant, 52 years old. He is five foot seven inches in height, slightly rotund, with a grey receding hair line. His blue eyes are deep set with baggy dark circles beneth them. Usually unshaven he has a perpetual unkempt look about him. His bulbous nose is pock marked and his mouth is smallish with unusually thin lips. Sam posseses a volatile temper and is universally disliked by his co-workers. He is divorced, and hasn't shared a female's companionship in over a decade. An ex-convict, he is always in pursuit of his next scam, internet identity theft being his forte. He feels at odds with the world and age has triggered a sense of urgency. Having lived in Minnesota his entire life, retiring to a warmer locale is his ultimate dream, and he'll stop at nothing to obtain his goal. Recently he has been scanning the obituaries in the local newspaper looking for widows as potential new victims.
First Post...yay... Name: HK, as in Hunter-Killer as that is his unofficial rank in a paramilitary organization. His actual first name is Terrance, but only true friends are permitted to call him that. He doesn't have many of those. Last name unknown. Appearance 6'2" and over 200 lbs of muscle. He possesses the body any normal man would after dedicating himself to a military lifestyle and undertaking constant physical exercise. A black male, he shaves his head not to look intimidating or anything like that. He simply doesn't won't hair that can be grabbed and pulled in close quarters combat. He carries himself with pride and does not hesitate to use his size to intimidate men or women when needed. Attitude Borderline arrogant, but he can back up his bravado. Often wonders if his chosen profession (hunting down and capturing/killing rogue psychics) is proper as he himself possesses a psionic ability. Specialty He possesses a unique form of precognition. In battle, particularly close combat, he can predict an enemy's movements seconds before they happen. Thus he knows what punch you are about to throw and, accordingly, how to seize your wrist and snap it when you do. He has no superspeed or strength, however. But he can "dodge" bullets if he knows what trajectories they are about to take and simply moves BEFORE they are fired. He does the same when targets are about to use their powers. He instintively predicts where your attack is coming from and has conditioned his body/mind to react accordingly. But a human being can only move so fast so sometimes he does take a glancing blow or even a full-on hit. That's what armor is for. Age Late twenties to early thirties. Terrances tells himself that his goal is to protect the public from rogue psions, and psions from the public's wrath by stopping the bad ones before they make everybody look bad. In truth he often wonders if he is just a sociopath using that as an excuse to do what he does best: hunt. Terrance takes no thrill from killing. Any fool can kill. It takes strength to close in and take an opponent down on their terms. On many occassions he has been reprimanded for letting psions have the chance to use their full powers (controlling fire, throwing cars, whatever) just to make it more sporting. But in the end he gets results when other men would get fried or turned to goo. Weapons A variety of automatic firearms and less-than-lethal weapons like tazers (as supposedly he is to capture targets if possible). As spirit his organization is supposed to be a special POLICE force. Not an army. He also wears body armor augmented with systems to boost strength and speed. This armor is less durable than the standard issue for officers in his organization as he had it altered so as not to hamper his agility/speed. Terrance prefers to simply close in and pummle opponents into submission as most psions are actually women and only possess freakish mind powers (not invincible). Up close they are no match for a heavyset man. He occassinally wears a mirrored faceplate/helm as many psionic powers are far more powerful if eyecontact is made (ie for protection), but he also enjoys the idea of the last thing targets seeing is their own frightened faces.
This is still in the alpha stage so here we go Name: Akira Gender: Female Age: 17 Career: Gang Leader Build: Muscular Height: 5 foot 9 Weight: 170 pounds Hair Color: Orange Hair Style: Jagged Layers Likes: Stealing Dislikes: Cops Talents: Picking Locks, Evading Cops, stealing from stores, living the gang life Elemental Affinity: Earth Weapon of Choice: Sword, Martial Arts Good Qualities: Does not target the poor, the weak and children Why is she a villain: Little is known about Akira. She has no money and no job. At a young age, she was taken by a street gang and later, she eventually became the leader. Her parents were probably killed when Akira was little.
Harald Halfnose’s twenty one years, seven being as a Viking, didn’t due justice for his vicious countenance. His face had been savaged by steel and fire as a youth . Half his face was a caricature of death the other covered in an unkempt filthy beard. Some called him Halfbeard on account of it. But never to his face or within his earshot. Only half Harald’s face had survived the night of the raid. None of his family had. A big man even amongst those Jutes of his homeland. A virtual giant amongst the English. Two things drove Harald, mayhem and greed. And he was highly skilled and sucessful at both. A true Viking.
Valkimmer Stone is invisible. He leaves no prints, trails, or patterns - only dead bodies. When seen amongst a crowd, one of varying appearance, no distinction can be made. He is a chameleon of stature, weight, and disposition. His thirst for blood isn't diffucult to comprehend. He thirst's for blood like one thirst's for hope. The result of his killings in no way contribute to his financial or moral status. He kills as a means of survival. Individuality. How does he designate his victims you ask? He fancies the breathing kind of animals. The sychophants of oxygen intake. Are they more deserving? Not with a knife in their lungs. Those in pursuit of his seizing, are in pursuit of themselves. Worth a try
hi folks, it seems to me the real problem is not so much knowing the details of your character..appearance/dress/body language/psychological and emotional profile/quirks/foibles/way of speaking...the real problem, for me, is how to gently sprinkle these details, in the best possible order, over the narrative so the reader builds a 'complete' picture without even realising it.. of course you could say it's just a question of attaching some characteristic detail by means of a few adverbial phrases and well-chosen adjectives to a given action/decision/response made by your character to something out there..but then you face the questions: how economical should I be? what about pacing? what does the reader need to know first?
I agree with you, Robert, but this thread is for a specific exercise. Honestly, if a thread like this were created now, I'd have moved it to Word Games. It doesn't discuss strategy, it's just an interactive exercise of dubious value.
Mr McTavish is a tall, well built man, at 6'3 and 230lbs, he is muscular but lean, his physicality at it's most evident when shirtless. He prefers jeans and t-shirts as his everyday clothes, but does have the odd dressy shirt and trousers in thje back of the wardrobe, his hair is short and dark, his blue eyes are like cold steel. He's only 28, but acts more like 48. He usually likes to stay quiet and in the background, except for when he does his job. As an MMA fighter, he dedicates most of his free time to his training, leaving little room for much else in his life. He works as a labourer at a local timber yard, he likes the fact that his job keeps him in shape and his employers keep to themselves, but a low wage is one of the reason he fights. As a fighter, he is not well known despite being undefeated and having finished all of his opponents, he has shown an exceptional mean streak in the ring, in one fight breaking his opponents arm in a 3 places with a barrage of knee attacks, then knocking him out. In another fight he held onto a choke hold after his opponent had submitted ending his opponent's fighting career. He secretly resents the fact that he has to fight to make money. He believes that combat sports represent a darker side of human nature which he hates deeply and he hates himself for being a part of it, though the controlled violence, the capability to dominate another human being attracts him and the lure of the spotlight is hard to resist. Recently he has been taking notice of a lot of wife beatings, violence against children by their parents and paedophilia in his area, something which he is determined to put a stop to at any cost. He recently has stepped up his fight training to include more lethal attacks and has been looking into surveillance methods, there is a local councillor who recently got let off after being accused of paedophilia against his own daughter, the court did not have enough evidence to try him and the police have begun to despair. He often spends weeks watching his targets learning their pattern of movement and behaviour, striking at them when they are alone. He does not use weapons in his attacks if he can avoid it, he prefers to attack up close and personal and make them look into his eyes as he beats the life from them. He will knock out his victims and drag them off to a secret location where he will subject them to various forms of torture. There over a course of time he will beat them to death gradually breaking down their bodies, before he chokes the life from them. He is very methodical he has taken an interest in forensics and has gone to great lengths to conceal his identity, but he wants the authorities to know why he kills. He leaves the body of the pervert councillor on the steps of the court that would have tried him with a message. "How can you fail the people, by allowing scum like this to walk among us? If you weren't so corrupt, I wouldn't have to do your job for you. Make sure the rest of his kind know this, none of you are safe any longer."
Cameron Wilderwolf appearance: An annoying Look, Blonde hair and a know it all. attitude: know it all. specialty: Scratching with wolf claws and biting hard. age: Around 17-19. hair colour if any: Blonde. male/female: Male height: About normal.
Her name is Miranda Keith, she stands at 5'4", has shoulder length dirty blonde hair. Is 27 years old. Is straightforward and efficient, both in her personal life and at work. She is a biochemist in a private research lab. It is in current times. She does not date, but spends weekends at bars and clubs. She is very attractive and voluptuous. Men flock to her, and she uses this to her advantage. Her first kill was when she was 23. She was doing graduate work for her Doctorate in Biochemistry, and there were only a few slots open for a fellowship. She poisoned the other student's lunch with some of his own research material. He died 12 hours later of what appeared to be a heart attack. An autopsy revealed it was his own research material, and it was presumed an accident. Miranda was thrilled by the kill, but knew she needed more subtle methods to keep from getting caught. Four years later, and she has developed incredible posions, but her urges are accelerating. At this point in her development, she has killed an entire barful of peoplem(20+) via slipping chemicals in the drinks: it looks like massive food poisoning.
The character is textbook serial killer. So, perfect. I took a history class last spring called Crime in America. The real serial killer profiles were just like Cogito's character. In my humble opinion this makes the character very believable.
Her name is Marrissa D'low Rowl, and she is an angry seventeen-year-old girl. Badly abused by her uncle - her only living relative - she finds herself with nobody else to turn to, except an abusive boyfriend named Jimmy, who steals cars and robs banks for a living, often encouraging Marrissa to participate on these weekend activities, when the two aren't in school. Marrissa is 5'2, red-black hair, slick, red black hair, mind you, and she always, always wears jeans and a t-shirt - nothing else. She has been diagnosed with DID, Dissociative Identity Disorder, meaning she has multiple personalities. Jake, one of her male personalities, likes to steal cars with Jimmy. "Jake" - yes, also Marrissa - first robbed a bank when she was seventeen. She was caught. They let her off with a warning because there was no evidence to prove that she helped out with the event. She will later rob 22 banks in her lifetime, only to be shot in an attempt to rob a bank in Columbus, Ohio.
Character Creation Workshop (Part 1 Villains) My villains name is Lebby. Lebby has a tall slim build, has longish brown hair swept across his face, and his eyes are a light blue. He has pale skin, and is clean shaven. He is considered by the characters in the story to be quite handsome. He is always very calm, and rather cheerful. He is usually smiling or whistling, however he is utterly ruthless and doesn't hesitate to kill anyone who gets in his way. He has lost a great deal of his humanity, and could be described as a sociopath, except that he loves another character in the story; Lucy. Lebby has the ability to time travel, due to him finding one in the wreckage of a crashed alien ship. In the ship he becomes possessed by the memories of an evil deceased alien, who commands him to subjegate the world under one ruler. This is the alien philosophy of Complete Control. (Im going for a comic book esque, sci fi, gentlemen villain here) At the beggining of the series he is young, mid to late twenties. But by the end he is several hundred years old, although his physical appearence is still that of a young man. Lebby is a villain because his body was invaded by an evil aliens memories, which takes form in Lebby as his alter ego 'Butterscotch.' Butterscotch is prone to blurting out obscenities using Lebby's own mouth and voice, and he can control Lebby's body directly, or even torture Lebby. However its not a simple case of 'He's good, hes just being controlled,' because Lebby relishes the concept of complete control, and he enjoys being villainous throughout time. He also doesn't really care whether people live or die. Lebby lives in the near future (2020 i think at the beggining of the story) but he soon visits a past version of himself in 2016 before he found the time machine. Then it goes back to medieval britain, and finally in the fourth part, it is in the late 1930's. Lebby can travel through time at his will. Parts 2,3 and 4 are written from other 'Lebbys' view points, a past version of himself, an anscestor and his son. His goals are to subjugate the world under one ruler, him, and ridding it of religion, corruption and poverty. however if anyone speaks out in this world, they are killed instantly. Lebby always wears a black suit, with a white undershirt. His weapon of choice is a silenced pistol he conceals in his suit. He later also uses a laser gun he nicked from his nemesis that he killed. He uses the silenced pistol so he can quickly and silently dispose of any threats. Lebby is very fond of nick naming the people around him (sometimes this annoys the other characters). he also loves pears, and is often munching one. He speaks in a very formal tone, and is polite to everyone he meets. Even in the heat of battle he will usually remain calm, and still speak very politely. He is determined and intelligent, and he only cares for his closest associates. He shares a love hate relationship with his alien alter ego Butterscotch, and although Butterscotch angrily insults Lebby at every available opportunity, Lebby usually just replies politely with a compliment. However the two occasionally engage in mock fights, with Butterscotch bellowing, and Lebby sarcastically replying. Lebby relies on Buttercsotchs strength though, and Butterscotch relies on Lebby's body, because if Lebby dies, Butterscotch also dies.
My main villain is Wilbur. I chose that name because it sounded fitting for an old man, which is what he is. I fear it sounds slightly warm though so maybe the name will change. He is completely bald. As a side-effect of mastering darkness (known as Ying in my book) the white in his eyes have become black and his pupil is pure white. He suffers greatly from wrinkles and sagging skin. I have trouble choosing what people wear...something dark, I am playing on stereotype with him. He is convinced he is right in what he is doing so he has a habit on arguing with the protagonists, even when he is proved wrong. He has a foul mouth and uses sarcasm to the point where when he says something without sarcasm, people think he is sarcastic. He usually leans on his scythe as he walks due to his back problem. His ability is amazing eyesight. Anything he can see, he can see in great detail. His is 64 years old. He used to have dirty blonde hair in his youth but now he is bald. He is male. He is 169cm tall. He is a villain after his rebellious son convinced him that there was balance in the world. Due to Wilbur's great charity work, he thought his life was outbalanced. He loved his son very much and also wanted to try to help him out of his waster lifestyle choice. It was a mixture of those two that made him join Ying's side. He slowly became obsessed with darkness and after an intense battle with his son over his son's new drug addiction, his mental stability was shaken and his sense of 'balance' in the world was warped. He now believed that the world would balance itself out and that no matter how much he embraced darkness and did what he wanted. He wants to test this theory and is now searching for a way to destroy Ying to test the world's ability to re-balance itself. He is going to do this by creating a society dedicated to hunting down the ancient secrets that are hidden in the world by the elves. The secret Wilbur is looking for is the ability to become the Grim Reaper, he thinks it is the only force powerful enough to kill Ying. He lives in a hidden suburb of Melbourne, hidden by illusion masters so that the people gifted with abilities may live in peace. The year is not exact but it is around 2000-2020 time. He resides in the Ying mansion. He wants to test the world's ability to rebalance itself, if proved true, he would indulge himself in his deepest desires, thinking the world will fix itself. This is clearly illogical but due to the darkness he inhabits and the brain damage from his son's attack, he thinks it is logical. He never used to use a weapon but after he got his goal to become the grim reaper, he begun using a scythe. The wrap it up, he is a stubborn, mentally unstable, foul mouthed old man who has suppressed his love for his son very deeply. He likes to intimidate people as well, so he usually gets up close to his enemy and taunts right to their face. Any help or telling me any holes in my development would be greatly appreciated
A Work In Progress George "Babble" Bable stared at his reflection in the dirty mirror of his bathroom cabinet, barely recognizing the forty-three year old face that leered back. I place of the brown and naturally curly locks that used to dominate his head was a thinning and straggly mess of mud mixed with a premature patch of white. What remained of this tangled skein was unkempt and oily. A four day growth of stubble dirtied his cheeks and chin and a bulbous nose reddened by too many years of hard alchahol stood sentry over his dry and cracked lips. The sneer he offered the reflection offered no love, no compassion; only a series of chipped and nictotine stained teeth. The floor was littered with crumples of toilet paper, used to blose his nose and discarded thoughtlessly. Even if there had been a trash can to use, no doubt George would have ignored it anyway. It was no different than the rest of the trailer at four-thirty-two Dresden Avenue. Dirty, unkempt, and decorated with clumps of trash and molding paper plate off old food. He had assumed the mobile home from his mother upon he passing nearly a decade ago and had proceeded from day one of her demise to sully the home in a manner that would have given her an aneurysm to rival the fatal heart attack she died from. At least she went to the grave not knowing his favorite past time was murdering small animals that he could find around the neighborhood. Whenever Babble (a nickname given from his youth due to a mild form of Turrets Syndrome) came across a stray, he would coax it with some food scrap he usually kept handy in his run down pickup, and toss it into the cab before he cold be noticed by any of the nosy little prissy ****s in the cul-de-sac. After getting the hapless animal home, he would play with it for a while until the "reds" took over. The "reds" was what he called the anger that seethed through him for no explainable reason and was used as his scapegoat. If a misgiving occured while he was on the "reds", well then...hey, **** It, it wasn't his fault. After extinguishing the snatched animal's life, he normally enjoys a hearty stew comprised of the carcass.
Her name is Faith. She is polite and quiet, the last to speak in a conversation but the first to draw an opinion. Her long, light red hair flows over her shoulders in waves, each swell forming a curl at the end as it hangs around her tiny shoulders like a cloak. Everyone she meets falls in love with her, using the phrase "She is the sweetest girl" when describing her to others. Faith just turned twenty, and she is about to ruin the lives of everyone she claims to love. She has fallen in love for the first time with a boy who doesn't love her. The 'sweetest girl' you'll ever meet is about to blossom from a demure flower into a branch of thorns. Her weapons are her words, hidden behind a smiling veil as she spins lie after lie in a web that will entangle all those around her. Gossip isn't always true, but it doesn't make it any less damaging.
Name: 'Mort', The Mortician, Death in the Flesh, The Grim Reaper, Death, etc. Physical Appearance: As a human he is a tall thin man with gold wire rimmed glasses and fire red hair with hazel eyes, his skin is sun-kissed and flawless. He wears smart clothes in varying shades of blue and often wears a vest. As Death, his figure becomes more skeletal and his hair takes on the appearance of fire. His eyes become non-existent and his body becomes wrapped in black smoke, leaving only his bony arms, face and hair visible. Attitude: At first he is accommodating and takes on the role of willing mentor, teaching the trade and giving away secrets. Upon his charge over taking his abilities and wrecking havoc in the world of the dead he turns aggressive. Specialty. He specialises in all things dead and carries with him tricks of the morticians trade, his version of the Scythe. Age: Ageless. Why did they become the villain? Mort becomes the antagonist after a few key instances of his underlings disobedience: 1. She brings a soul back into the realm of the living. 2. She refuses to succeed him as the Reaper. 3. She turns one of his 'Vampires' into a blood drinking Vampire. 4. She's insufferable and needs to be taken down a peg!! Goal: Kill the brat!
Max appears to be a stereotypical juvenile delinquent. At nineteen he is of moderate height, slim and shifty looking. Max has dark hair, dark eyes and a dark expression. He always wears tattered jeans and a hoodie, perhaps to hide his identity. He can be found skulking around dark alley ways, destitute areas and urban hangouts. He opts for a ‘lone wolf’ way of life and rarely speaks, however when he does people listen. He is a perfectionist, and takes great care when ‘working’. Max ‘studies’ people and their lives. He may tail someone for a few days until he finds someone more interesting. While most stalkers prefer to make themselves known to their victims, Max is like a shadow, quick and fleeting, ever moving, never noticed. He is as close to being invisible as is humanely possible. When he discovers his victims’ secrets he often uses them, for monetary gain. Max knows that everyone has ‘dirty laundry’.
Maria (no last name is mentioned) is an eighteen year old vampire who lives in a castle with other young vampires. She is the strongest and cruelest of all of the vampires. She also has the most powerful coven. She is five feet and two inches tall and weighs around 110 pounds. She has very blonde hair, almost white, which reaches down to her bottom and has a dry texture about it. Maria has black eyes, which are always outlined by heavy amounts of black mascara, eyeliner and eye shadow. She has very pale skin and at a first glance, appears to be weak enough to be knocked over by a gust of wind. The school that she attends can be quite dangerous at times and, while Maria is able to fight hand to hand or with weapons, she is more skilled with guns. For this reason, she normally travels with someone from her coven that can protect her. Maria is dangerous because she has mastered the art of getting inside of her opponents’ heads. She is also extremely cruel, as experiences in the past have left her without any compassion. She grew up in poverty with her mother, who was a hooker. When she was eight, Maria was sexually molested by one of her mother’s frequent clients. This continued until she turned twelve. She decided she had had enough and killed herself by jumping off of a twelve story building. A vampire who lived at the castle/school found her body and turned her into a vampire before she began to decompose. She began her new life with an unbeatable amount of rage and a lack of mercy and compassion. She was born 18 years prior to this date. She wants to eliminate her fellow vampires and to rule the world; inflicting pain on those who oppose her. She usually wears all black attire, along with her boyfriend’s leather jacket. Maria also has no morals of any sort. She has killed many people just for lying to her, takes pleasure out of killing people to obtain their blood and has, on separate occasions, manipulated her closest acquaintances. In one instance, while trying to convince a lesbian girl to join her coven, she had a one night stand with the girl and then continued to have relations with her boyfriend at the time. She doesn’t care who she hurts as long as she gets what she wants. Sorry it´s really long. Anyway, i´d love some feedback
Name: David Physical Appearence: Tall, handsome, easy going looks, pale clean skin, light blue eyes. He has long brown hair, swept across his forhead, and is usually garbed in a suit. Personality: His most noticeable character trait is that he shares his body with an evil alien alter ego (theres backstory to how this happened, but it isn't important for now ) Oh and he's also a time traveller He is suave, cheery and charming. He approaches his nefarious tasks with energy and enthusiasm. He is also bordering on sociopathic, due to his alter ego (whom he names Butterscotch) and kills innocents without hesitation, often smiling as he does. He only cares for those closest to him, his feelings for them culminate as his last scrap of humanity. When dealing with others, he can seem aloof and distracted, often because he is thinking to himself. He is full of jokes, and one liners, but do not be fooled, he would kill anyone at a seconds notice. Age: His aging has slowed ever since he came into contact with his alien alter ego Butterscotch. He looks to be a young man in his early twenties. Objective: Complete Control for the entire planet. One ruler. No religion, no democracy, no violence, no racism, no free will. His alter ego Butterscotch introduced him to this philosophy, and now he travels in time, altering history so he can have his 'perfect' future.
hmm.. how to tell something about my 'villain'/antagonist without spoiling important pieces of the story my villain: ..is not human-that much is true ..is not born evil ..looks cute, quintessential bi-shonen look, well tended, smart dressed, eloquent, raised well mannered ..has good qualities too! appears helpfull, a good listener, to have a compassionate side. ..is a 1st class manipulator ..killed dozens of entities by orchestrating the right crime on the right moment, washes hands clean on all those crimes. (a serious bodycount...) ..blames it on it's yought.. significant parent who neglected the emotional needs of the offspring therefore a reason for a deligated killing spree.. .. I guess one of my villains most evil moves would be talking other entities into killing themselves becouse of the uselessness of their puny existances.. messes with their head and insecurities.. (really sadisticly) and using innocent entities, unwittingly and/or unwillingly as controlled puppets... for diabolical killing spree's.. ..not a member of an organised crime unit but would do great as a mobster boss.., or evil guru for that matter.. I could tell so much more but it would totaly ruin the plot, the theme and anything else..
Addison Bailey is is 20 years old and lives in Brooklyn. He has gray eyes and his skin is olive colored. His black hair is medium length and unkempt. He is short standing at only 5'5. He dresses in shabby clothes due to living in poverty. He is a very calm and appears to be completely serene but is extremely quick to anger. His anger comes without warning making him all the more dangerous. If made angry he will quickly and violently lash out at the offending person then when they are not a problem to him anymore he easily slips back into his quiet and charming self. He is a cold blooded murderer who is fascinated by fire and so he burns his victims. He doesn't realize he is evil. He only kills for the sake of his brother Jasper. He was separated from his brother and his brother does not know he is alive. He watches his brother wherever he goes and he sees the people his brother interacts with. If he feels these people are a threat to his precious Jasper he will kill them without a thought, never realizing the pain he is causing him
