Can someone please give me a technique in the line: ''I guess in this society, being male and an asshole makes you worthy of our time.'' This is a line from the movie ''10 Things I Hate About You''
I think it looks right. I keep wanting to put a comma after asshole, but it doesn't sound as good as it is now. I'm not sure what technique you want.
"I guess, in this society, being male and an asshole makes you worthy of our time." The first comma is needed (I think it's what's called an Oxford comma) because the sub-clause "in this society" could be omitted without spoiling the grammatical correctness of the sentence, although it would change the sense of it.
Not sure what you're looking for. The line is what it is. It isn't even a particularly strong piece of dialogue. Apart from some gender bitterness, it doesn't really show much about the speaker, the person spoken to/about, or the relationship between them. It has little depth. But every scrap of dialogue need not be a gem of insight and subtlety. Some just set the stage.
Are you asking us to describe what techniques it uses? Are you asking us to tell you the name of a technique that you can use to improve it? Are you asking if it's grammatically correct? What are you asking?
